考博作文批改范例：
Good Health
The desire for good health is universal.
Not only man or woman, but also old or young are hope have good health with social progress
. （
第一句已经说了渴望健康是人人都有的。所以第二句话明显是多余的。只不过是把第一句话解释了一下。很罗嗦
。）
Owing to it is a essential require to high quality study,work or life.
（
这句话的语法结构不正确，应该是good health is essential to us.
）
There are many ways to keep fit. For exampel (
注意拼写错误
),
on
（
in
） the first place, we could take some physical exercises .We can run,swim , play tennis or others. On (
in
)the second place, we shoud (
should,拼写
) balance diet
,
（
改成句号，后面注意大写
）we eat meat, rice, vegetables and friut （
拼写
）every day. Of cause, we do not forget to drink water, it is important to
you
（
前面用的代词we,这里却用了you,一定要保持人称代词一致，否则会出现混乱
。）. Finally, we
shoud
（
拼写
）keep a nice mood.
As a college student, when I have free time ,I often take
pyhsical
（
拼写
）exercises, sometimes
I runs
（
主谓要一致
）alone the racetrack, sometimes rids （
拼写错误
）bicycle on the street. I am also careful with my diet and I often drinks white water. on the whole, it is important to have good health than
everthing
（
拼写
）.
点评：
首先，第一段要写健康的重要性，你写的过于笼统。语言方面，注意拼写错误，注意主谓一致，文中有多处主谓一致问题，不在一一指出，望今后加以注意。注意人称代词要一致的问题。注意标点符号的正确使用。加油！继续努力！
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